Post by Katara on Oct 4, 2008 19:21:55 GMT -5
Hi!! Katara here and I will begin a review of your character.
An Earth bender …nice!! We need a few of those!!
* Please review your application for spelling and sentence structure. You appearance section, while filled with interesting elements, is a run on sentence with continual commas.
*Please describe the tattoos and perhaps why he has them.…details. You need to add more details in all areas.
* What are cloak like leggings?
History:
* How many brothers and sisters.? Please give further details on his history.
* What disappeared? His bending ability?
* He left the rich man’s compound? His parents were rich?
* The low latent disease is a bit God moding as you have presented it. Learning ( I have had a psychology course ) doesn’t work as you have described it in your bio. You can have an ability to learn but the means (books, teacher…visually watching a skill …these are necessary to make this occur. )
ADD has similar traits as Autism and I can believe he may be intelligent …but often people with this particular psychosis focus their learning in one very concentrated direction.
I will ask for feedback on this issue from Aang
* He can’t stand people who can be heard in a three mile radius? Why would he even engage with anyone? Please clarify this.
* What is a hard person?
One of the best methods for this ADD moderator to find errors in my sentence structures is to read the them aloud. Just a helpful idea.
An Earth bender …nice!! We need a few of those!!
* Please review your application for spelling and sentence structure. You appearance section, while filled with interesting elements, is a run on sentence with continual commas.
*Please describe the tattoos and perhaps why he has them.…details. You need to add more details in all areas.
* What are cloak like leggings?
History:
* How many brothers and sisters.? Please give further details on his history.
* What disappeared? His bending ability?
* He left the rich man’s compound? His parents were rich?
* The low latent disease is a bit God moding as you have presented it. Learning ( I have had a psychology course ) doesn’t work as you have described it in your bio. You can have an ability to learn but the means (books, teacher…visually watching a skill …these are necessary to make this occur. )
ADD has similar traits as Autism and I can believe he may be intelligent …but often people with this particular psychosis focus their learning in one very concentrated direction.
I will ask for feedback on this issue from Aang
* He can’t stand people who can be heard in a three mile radius? Why would he even engage with anyone? Please clarify this.
* What is a hard person?
One of the best methods for this ADD moderator to find errors in my sentence structures is to read the them aloud. Just a helpful idea.
